Paranormal and contemporary writer CC MacKenzie at the Fizz and Fangs blog tagged me. I'm honored--I think.
First, the rules:
1. Go to page 77 of your current MS/WIP
2. Go to line 7
3. Copy down the next 7 lines, sentences, or paragraphs, and post them as they’re written.
4. Tag 7 authors, and let them know.
Here's my snippet:
Midge cleared her throat. "Find the baby's mother for me."
"Why? What's she to you?"
"If you find the mom before the police do, I might convince her to assign custody to me."
A vein stood out in Chet's neck. "You're sixty-one years old."
"Grandparents get custody every day of the week."
"You're not the baby's grandmother."
Midge pulled the edges of her cardigan across her middle. "That's right. Rub it in."
I'm tagging the following:
Sarah Andre
Midge cleared her throat. "Find the baby's mother for me."
"Why? What's she to you?"
"If you find the mom before the police do, I might convince her to assign custody to me."
A vein stood out in Chet's neck. "You're sixty-one years old."
"Grandparents get custody every day of the week."
"You're not the baby's grandmother."
Midge pulled the edges of her cardigan across her middle. "That's right. Rub it in."
I'm tagging the following:
Sarah Andre
Suzan Harden
Lark Howard
Kay Hudson (who just earned a Golden Heart nomination from Romance Writers of America)
Jennette Marie Powell
Lark Howard
Kay Hudson (who just earned a Golden Heart nomination from Romance Writers of America)
Jennette Marie Powell
Soon enough, I'll get to read excerpts from those writers. Ah, now I see where "lucky" comes in.
27 comments:
Oh, interesting snippet. Now I'm really curious. Nicely done.
Ok. So now I'm it. You'll see my snippet on Monday, April 2.
Oh, I like this excerpt a lot. I can see there's lots of tension in this story. Thanks for sharing this, Pat!
Funny you should mention this, Lynn - one thing I've noticed is that none of us seem to have problems getting conflict into that page 77, lines 7-14! Thanks for thinking of me, Pat - and you too, Lynn! I'll post my seven lines on Thursday. :)
Okay, you asked for it, Pat:
Although she was a shareholder in her brother’s company, her knowledge didn’t go much the equipment it provided for the Foundation. And here was a guy she’d never heard of--a revenant, no less--plugging into the Durand Tech network.
“So you sleeping with my brother or what?” she asked.
Bodie’s head whipped around and she was hit with a whole lot of testosterone and a are-you-$^*#ing-kidding-me glare. Then he seemed to reconsider and turned back to the sensor. “Yeah, I guess you could call it that.”
I love the excerpt, Pat, and hope we get to read the rest of the story very soon!
I posted mine on FB, but had heard it was to be page 7, so here's pg 77: (Locked, Loaded and Lying rewrite.)
“Didn’t the police ever look at the other boyfriend?”
“I don’t think they thought it was necessary, but the press claims he has an ironclad alibi. My brother was found at the scene with means, motive and opportunity. But he didn’t kill her, please don’t be afraid.”
She blinked in surprise. “I’m not.”
“I’m just saying.”
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What I learned thru this exercise is that I can't count- I keep posting 9 or 10 sentences, LOL!
Thanks for tagging me, I am honored.
Very intriguing, Pat. I can't wait to read the whole novel.
WOW!! Love the dialogue here. So tight and real, it bounces off the page. Well done!
Thanks, Pat! I've got a conundrum, since I don't have a WIP. (I'm doing non-fiction blog to book.) Might have to drag something the shelf and dust it off!
Thanks, Pat! I've got a conundrum, since I don't have a WIP. (I'm doing non-fiction blog to book.) Might have to drag something the shelf and dust it off!
I look forward to your snippet, Lynette.
Sadly, not everyone's excerpt is flavored by anchovy. Lynn. Thanks for stopping by.
Jennette wrote: "...one thing I've noticed is that none of us seem to have problems getting conflict into that page 77, lines 7-14!" Okay, okay, these are lines 9-16. It's easier for a reader to be dropped into dialogue, isn't it?
I look forward to your excerpt, Jennette.
Whoa, Lark! Now I want to know all about revenants, and isn't the intriguing one.
I'm very happy to have you in my corner, Sheila.
I want to keep reading, Sarah!
Thanks, Fabio! You, Ginger, Coleen, and Lynn have revived my interest in YA. I look forward to YOUR books.
Thanks, Ginger. I worry my fiction writing is too spare. "Tight" sounds worlds better.
Ooh, Debra. I won't turn down a peek at a manuscript relegated to the shelf. Methinks you need a second opinion.
Definitely intriguing! I love stories about relationships. Sounds like something I'd love!
good snippett. can't wait to read it.
This is cool! Being soooo behind the times, I'd never heard of it--I haven't even caught up to six-sentence Sunday!
Liked that snippet.
Ooh! I feel a fight coming on. Nicely done. Had me ready to jump someone. LOL
DebraKristi
Fun excerpt, Pat! We're the lucky ones.
What a fun activity and new to me.
Pat, your excerpt was terrific. Conflict and charcter. So much meaning was conveyed with a gesture in I think it was the last line - with the sweater. Great job!
Wow Pat, my brain has been on vacation! LOL! How did I miss this? I love it! I love the tension in the dialogue! I now want to read the whole thing! Is it finished? :)
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