Friday, March 30, 2012

Tag! I'm It.

The Lucky 7 Meme is a virtual game of tag played amongst writers. Sure, there's a whiff of procrastination technique hovering over it, but, more importantly, it allows us a peek into others' works in progress. We get to hear our friends' authorial voices and meet one or more of their characters. In addition, because the meme's rules drop us into the story's flow and only give us a few lines, we're left wanting more.

Paranormal and contemporary writer CC MacKenzie at the Fizz and Fangs blog tagged me. I'm honored--I think.

First, the rules:
1. Go to page 77 of your current MS/WIP


2. Go to line 7


3. Copy down the next 7 lines, sentences, or paragraphs, and post them as they’re written.


4. Tag 7 authors, and let them know.


Here's my snippet:

Midge cleared her throat. "Find the baby's mother for me."
"Why? What's she to you?"
"If you find the mom before the police do, I might convince her to assign custody to me."
A vein stood out in Chet's neck. "You're sixty-one years old."
"Grandparents get custody every day of the week."
"You're not the baby's grandmother."
Midge pulled the edges of her cardigan across her middle. "That's right. Rub it in."

I'm tagging the following:

Sarah Andre




Suzan Harden

Lark Howard

Kay Hudson (who just earned a Golden Heart nomination from Romance Writers of America)

Jennette Marie Powell


Soon enough, I'll get to read excerpts from those writers. Ah, now I see where "lucky" comes in.

27 comments:

Lynette M Burrows said...

Oh, interesting snippet. Now I'm really curious. Nicely done.

Ok. So now I'm it. You'll see my snippet on Monday, April 2.

LynNerdKelley said...

Oh, I like this excerpt a lot. I can see there's lots of tension in this story. Thanks for sharing this, Pat!

Jennette Marie Powell said...

Funny you should mention this, Lynn - one thing I've noticed is that none of us seem to have problems getting conflict into that page 77, lines 7-14! Thanks for thinking of me, Pat - and you too, Lynn! I'll post my seven lines on Thursday. :)

Lark Howard said...

Okay, you asked for it, Pat:


Although she was a shareholder in her brother’s company, her knowledge didn’t go much the equipment it provided for the Foundation. And here was a guy she’d never heard of--a revenant, no less--plugging into the Durand Tech network.

“So you sleeping with my brother or what?” she asked.

Bodie’s head whipped around and she was hit with a whole lot of testosterone and a are-you-$^*#ing-kidding-me glare. Then he seemed to reconsider and turned back to the sensor. “Yeah, I guess you could call it that.”

Sheila Seabrook said...

I love the excerpt, Pat, and hope we get to read the rest of the story very soon!

Sarah Andre said...

I posted mine on FB, but had heard it was to be page 7, so here's pg 77: (Locked, Loaded and Lying rewrite.)

“Didn’t the police ever look at the other boyfriend?”

“I don’t think they thought it was necessary, but the press claims he has an ironclad alibi. My brother was found at the scene with means, motive and opportunity. But he didn’t kill her, please don’t be afraid.”

She blinked in surprise. “I’m not.”

“I’m just saying.”
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What I learned thru this exercise is that I can't count- I keep posting 9 or 10 sentences, LOL!
Thanks for tagging me, I am honored.

Fabio Bueno said...

Very intriguing, Pat. I can't wait to read the whole novel.

Ginger Calem said...

WOW!! Love the dialogue here. So tight and real, it bounces off the page. Well done!

Debra Eve | Later Bloomer said...

Thanks, Pat! I've got a conundrum, since I don't have a WIP. (I'm doing non-fiction blog to book.) Might have to drag something the shelf and dust it off!

Debra Eve | Later Bloomer said...

Thanks, Pat! I've got a conundrum, since I don't have a WIP. (I'm doing non-fiction blog to book.) Might have to drag something the shelf and dust it off!

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Pat O'Dea Rosen said...

I look forward to your snippet, Lynette.

Pat O'Dea Rosen said...

Sadly, not everyone's excerpt is flavored by anchovy. Lynn. Thanks for stopping by.

Pat O'Dea Rosen said...

Jennette wrote: "...one thing I've noticed is that none of us seem to have problems getting conflict into that page 77, lines 7-14!" Okay, okay, these are lines 9-16. It's easier for a reader to be dropped into dialogue, isn't it?

I look forward to your excerpt, Jennette.

Pat O'Dea Rosen said...

Whoa, Lark! Now I want to know all about revenants, and isn't the intriguing one.

Pat O'Dea Rosen said...

I'm very happy to have you in my corner, Sheila.

Pat O'Dea Rosen said...

I want to keep reading, Sarah!

Pat O'Dea Rosen said...

Thanks, Fabio! You, Ginger, Coleen, and Lynn have revived my interest in YA. I look forward to YOUR books.

Pat O'Dea Rosen said...

Thanks, Ginger. I worry my fiction writing is too spare. "Tight" sounds worlds better.

Pat O'Dea Rosen said...

Ooh, Debra. I won't turn down a peek at a manuscript relegated to the shelf. Methinks you need a second opinion.

Emma Burcart said...

Definitely intriguing! I love stories about relationships. Sounds like something I'd love!

Louise Behiel said...

good snippett. can't wait to read it.

Liz Flaherty said...

This is cool! Being soooo behind the times, I'd never heard of it--I haven't even caught up to six-sentence Sunday!

Liked that snippet.

Anonymous said...

Ooh! I feel a fight coming on. Nicely done. Had me ready to jump someone. LOL

DebraKristi

August McLaughlin said...

Fun excerpt, Pat! We're the lucky ones.

Linda Barrett said...

What a fun activity and new to me.
Pat, your excerpt was terrific. Conflict and charcter. So much meaning was conveyed with a gesture in I think it was the last line - with the sweater. Great job!

Karen McFarland said...

Wow Pat, my brain has been on vacation! LOL! How did I miss this? I love it! I love the tension in the dialogue! I now want to read the whole thing! Is it finished? :)